Sunday, April 29, 2012

Contest Entry

Here is my entry for the Once Upon a Time writing contest....  I had fun writing this, but I've put off posting it until the last minute because I wasn't sure if I liked it.  But I decided I do :)

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            The lady sat peering out the window at the dripping trees in her rocking chair of wood.  Her face sculpted a solemn look filled with knowledge that could only have been attained through centuries.  She rested in front of her television, but her thoughts were deeply placed elsewhere.
            As the rain beat against her cottage roof and the chair rumbled across the hard floors, she started to hum a soft tune.  Once she began, everything throughout the small room seemed to faintly glow, and all other sounds faded.  On the mantle above the fire, the doll with the golden hair looked like it might smile, the top on the floor seemed on the tip of spinning, and the teapot on the table appeared it was going to pour itself.  Everything within the room had small glimmers of life.  The rain began to stop.
            Her small notes ended as a motor car parked outside the cottage.  The room became dull again, and the rain began once more.  A young gentleman jumped out of the car.  The old lady carelessly grunted.  Edward was always easily prone to panic.
            The door swung open.  “They know, Grandmother,” panted Edward.  “Come, hurry, we must go.  They know!”
            “We shall do no such thing,” the lady said, never taking her gaze out of the window. 
            “But we must!”
            Three men suddenly entered through the door way.  “You’ll be coming with us, Mrs. Morte, and your grandson,” smirked the leader.
            “Is that so?” she asked coolly, placing her sharp icy eyes upon them.  Beams of light choked the room and then vanished as quickly as they appeared.
            Edward stood breathless, his grandmother with a crooked grin on her thin lips.  Where the intruders once stood were now three candles.
            “We do not run, Edward,” she said bitterly. “Have I taught you nothing?”  Her face returned to the window.
            Slowly Edward exited the cottage, never glancing back.  As the door closed and he started pacing toward his car, he heard faint humming creep from behind the walls.  Sparks of sun light seeped through the trees.

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16 comments:

  1. WOAH. Now *that's* got my attention!!! I love how the old woman is magical, sweet, and a teeeeeensy bit creepy (maybe? still not sure - which is a good thing) all at the same time. Love this, MM!

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  2. MARY MARGARET. You're gonna have to finish this story because I want to know how it ends... I LOVE it! It definitely pulled me in.

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    1. Thanks Victoria!! I'm totally wanting to add more to this story. It was so much fun to write :)

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  3. Loved your second paragraph! Great description and I could see the whole scene as I read it!

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    1. Thank you so much!! and thanks for reading!

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  4. Ooh, loving the creepy granny! Thanks for entering :)

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    1. Thank you much!! Thanks for having the contest!

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  5. Dang girl, I'm with Victoria, I need to know how this ends!!!! The descriptions are beautiful and so creepy. I want to know more about this Grandmother...

    Ahh!! Such a great entry. :)

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    1. Thank you McKenzie!! I really want to continue the story.. It may become another of my random writing projects haha :)

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  6. Oh dear! What in the world is going on here?! There is so much awesome. Crazy old lady with magic. A grandson (who's a hottie in me brain brain butofcourse) who's been raised (?) by his grandmother. And people coming after them!? Love it! And I totally want to read more NOW!
    Thanks for sharing. Love this story.

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    1. Haha thank you!! And thanks for reading!

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  7. I would totally read more about this delightfully fiendish lady. Good job.

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